Reviews for Heat of the Night
| Angels Shadow |
03/20/06 - 05:52PM |
1: Begining |
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| Oh, okay, I know I just wrote a review, but I read some of the others, and I just wanted to make a point. Vampire dusting does seem very Whedon, but he's created such a pop culture type deal where little tidbits like that are bound to wind up in other stories. I've read other paranormal authors (Sherrilyn Kenyon comes to mind) who use the whole dusting concept. I wouldn't worry overmuch about using it - just my suggestion though. |
| Angels Shadow |
03/20/06 - 05:47PM |
1: Begining |
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The best part about this story is that its your own. I have one on the site that you've now motivated me to update. Anyway, the beginning is an excellent hook - starting a story off with action is always a great way to begin. It grabs the reader and sucks them in, making them want to see what happens next. You've done just that. I like the tidbit about Kara's father and family ... just a little bit, but enough to make the reader want to know more. And that right there already established Kara's internal conflict - which, hey where would any vampire hunter be without internal conflict?? And I also liked the part with Aaron - introduces some romantic tension which is always good for a story. Sorry, this is a bit long winded, but I just think its really great that this is an original and I definitely look forward to reading more. Keep it up!!
Author's Response: Don't worry about being long winded! I like the longer, more in depth reviews. Ones that actually tell me specifically what they like, not just...Good Job! Hope you keep enjoying it! |
| Beer Good |
03/20/06 - 05:15PM |
3: 3 |
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| Good chapter. Why do I get the feeling we'll meet that detective again 'fore too long...? And Aaron is a bit freaked, which is understandable and frankly it would be weird if he wasn't... still liking this a lot. |
| axel |
03/16/06 - 10:10PM |
2: 2 |
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Poor Kara. How's she supposed to fight her dad. It's a great idea, for a story. I do hope you keep going.
Author's Response: Thanks! I threw Kara's dad in there to add to the conflict and make it all more personel. Glad you're enjoying it! |
| BelovedSlayer |
03/15/06 - 02:01PM |
2: 2 |
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hey ksue its been a while:) are you really trying to make this awesome kick ass story into a novel? i have to say you really should consider doing that because so far from the beginning this has really captured my attention and it is very very well written and original. I hope you decide to actually get this publish because this story has lots and lots of potential. You're doing really awesome so far and let's hope that there will be a update asap pretty please!!
Author's Response: Yeah, it has been a while. Anyway, yes..I am trying to make this a novel. I'm not finished writing it yet, I usually post all that I have until Ig et a few more pages down. I'll try to post in a few days. Thanks! |
| Acila |
03/14/06 - 04:35PM |
2: 2 |
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| I loved the story, if your still looking for unique ways for a vamp to die, you can remember the vamps pills doused in Holy water that burned him from the inside, or axe there head off for more action, you could also have fun with other holy things, i bet you could come up with something interesting with a bible...I mean if crosses burn them I'm sure shoving pages of the bible down there trought would kill them eventually... Redmoon is right about the interview one...Blade the move has some interesting deaths how they float piece by piece on the breaze when subjected to the sun, or in the movies Underworld and underworld evelution....There's alot of options out there beside's Buffy. But you doing an awsem job, I think this could turn into a real novel. Keep it up. |
| Psyche2 |
03/10/06 - 06:10PM |
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| I like this, it has that interesting backstory that pulls you in. I have to say I do miss the Buffy part of slayage but I love your original character! Can't wait to read more! |
| Icequeen |
03/10/06 - 04:04PM |
2: 2 |
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| Pride and Prejudice is def. one of the best books ever written :) great job so far, I really like how this is an orginal story! |
| twinblade |
03/10/06 - 07:40AM |
2: 2 |
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| Great job and redmoon is right about 'Interview..' I just hadn't thought of that one. |
| twinblade |
03/10/06 - 07:32AM |
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| I think the best suggestions are said by Cory Haim's character in Lost Boys "...some will go screaming some go quietly. Some explode, some implode but all will try to take you with them..." (I think I quoted that correctly). Also the bodies not convienatly 'dusting away' could make for an interesting sub-plot with police, Feds, etc. |
| Beer Good |
03/10/06 - 03:59AM |
2: 2 |
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| This is really well-written - great characterizations, we get a clue about who is who right away, and the idea of her actual father being the big bad is creepy... also, a good idea to make it less Whedonesque, though I think you could potentially run into problems if you try TOO hard to make it different for difference's sake. But judging from what I've read so far, you should be able to handle that just fine... looking forward to reading more of this! |
| redmoon |
03/09/06 - 09:34PM |
2: 2 |
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Great update! Daddy's home... shiver. What a nemesis to have and maybe a whole guilt issue too. I like that she's got a fight-buddy (Betsy) and the beginnings of her very own gang - though to your credit you've maintained it as a very realistic, non-whedonesque version of a Slayer centered story (not quite so stereotypical as a lot of other fics), good job! I hadn't considered any other way for a vampire to "die" except by being whedonesquely dusted - but if you're looking for a different 'method of death' still appropriate to a vampire, the scene in "Interview With a Vampire" where Claudia "dies" is something different - sort of a cinder statue which collapses when touched. Anyway, this is a great story (Aaron certainly wastes no time, does he?) and I hope you continue!
Author's Response: Thanks for the idea. I tried t make Benny die in kind of a new way, where he just turned into a statue basically, but I like the crumble when touch thing. Hmmm, thanks again for the review! |
| twinblade |
03/07/06 - 07:51AM |
1: Begining |
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I agree with everything redmoon wrote in that review. I will add one suggestion though. The Vampire dusting is a very Whedonesque thing. A different exit for the undead might help keep this from being another Buffy spin-off story. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! And I agree with you 100% about the dusting thing, I just wasn't sure how to go about it. All I've ever seen is dusting. Any suggestions? |
| redmoon |
03/05/06 - 09:32PM |
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This is an excellent beginning, definitely worth continuing. Also, your spelling is inspirational. It's easy to identify with your characters and though it's obviously still early, the potential relationships are already being set up. Your dream sequence was well done and though dream-imagery can sometimes be confusing for a reader (not being inside the writer's mind), yours was simple and easy to follow. I hope you continue!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad that you found it easy to identify with the characters and that the dream sequence was easy to follow. I'm thinking I will continue, and I will post more when I do. Right now, though, that's all I got, so it will probably be another two weeks or so, depending on how busy I get. Thanks again! |
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