Reviews for Is the price worth paying?
| Fighter78 |
02/07/06 - 10:13PM |
3: Chapter 3. |
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You did good with this one. I have to admit I was a little surprised. but in a good way. Good job. =)
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. I knew, I could be pressing buttons, with this. (Anytime you bring up JC, you can inrage people, on both sides) But I'm really proud of this one. Thanks. |
| Fighter78 |
02/07/06 - 10:09PM |
2: Chapter 2 |
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| Still looking interesting. I'll read the last chapter and tell ya what I think. |
| Fighter78 |
02/07/06 - 10:03PM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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| This was interesting. I'll read on but if I find it blasphomous I'll stop but so far it's ok, I think. |
| DiabloVixen |
10/15/05 - 10:55PM |
3: Chapter 3. |
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I totally forgot about this Story... =( that is until you reminded me on your other Story... I Like it alot.. The First Parallels Many people in today's society, all those that look around them and question God's existance... and I love how it wasn't one-sided both Jesus and The First had Good arguements... Great Story... God Job
Author's Response: Thanks, I did try to have both side repested, because I didn't want to preach a sermon (THOUGH I COULD BROUTHERS, AND SISTERS, I COULD TESTFY! I COULD SCREAM THE PRAISE OF THE LORD, FROM THE HIGHEST MOUNTAINS, GLORY HALALUJA! but I won't ) plus i like the idea of seeing wath Jesus thinks of the way his peole represent him on earth. Did anyone notice the only thing that drove him to phisical voilents was the child molesting priest? |
| Ksue |
10/02/05 - 07:52PM |
3: Chapter 3. |
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Great story! Wow. Even though it was dark and the First was trying to convince Jesus that he died for nothing, it had a great message. I love that one person can undo the wrongs of so many others, all in God's name.
Author's Response: Thank for the review. I'm glad that people seem to like this. I do think there is a good message to it, and I'm proud of it. Thanks again. |
| redmoon |
09/28/05 - 06:17PM |
3: Chapter 3. |
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Very well done. As concise and complete a short story as ever I've read. It also showed a hint of the psychology of the First. (Someone scared of the true nature of humanity, perhaps?) If no one else does, than I will: Pat-on-the-back.
Author's Response: Thanks for the pat. I really proud of how it turned out, but it's still good to be apreceted. |
| Beer Good |
09/28/05 - 04:45PM |
3: Chapter 3. |
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Good ending! (Though I'm wondering if Jesus knows what the Nobel peace prize is (and if it means as much - heck, enough war-mongerers have won it over the years - as it should).) But it's a great image to end it on. Well done!
Author's Response: No he doesn't know in this story (probably should have explained that, ops) But from the way the nun was acting, he new it was something big, even if it's been tarnished), anyway he was more intreased in the way she lived, than an award. Thanks for the support. |
| redmoon |
09/26/05 - 10:45PM |
2: Chapter 2 |
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"Our primary weapon is surprise... suprise and fear. Wait... our TWO primary weapons are surprise and fear... wait..." Who doesn't love the Inquisition? I like where this is going and I'd like to see how the ultimate tragic irony might come into play. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I almost didn't put the python references in there. Though it might, distract from the serious story (but I couldn't help it) Thank for the review. |
| Peaches Girl |
09/26/05 - 09:29PM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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Slam dunk Axel. I knew you could do it. I love it so far. Cant wait to see how you finish it.
Author's Response: I'm working on the next (and last) chapter, now. So hopefuly in the next day, or two, It will be ready, Thanks for reviewing. |
| Beer Good |
09/26/05 - 02:15PM |
2: Chapter 2 |
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Hehe, nice Python reference. I really like this story, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Of course, I'm pretty sure I know how it ends, but... I still wanna read it. It's going to be interesting to see just how dark you'll make it.
Author's Response: Yea, Thats one problem with a History base story, the ending is never a surprise. But Hopefuly it will still be worth it, Thanks. |
| MissEdith |
09/15/05 - 08:25PM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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This story is off to a great start. I can't wait to see what else the First shows him. I agree with Beer and Shay about the spelling, but it isn't so bad that it interferes with comprehension, so it's ok. But you might want to fix the spelling mistake in the title ("worth" instead of "woth"). I'm kinda spelling obsessed :P
Author's Response: AAAAHHHAAAA! I DIDN'T EVEN NOTICE THAT! HOOKED ON PHONICS DIDN'T WORK FOR ME! OK, I'm calm now, AHHHAAA!
I did go back and fix the spelling. I think I got everything. The rest of the story, hopefuly will only take one chapter, maybe two, then we'll see how it works as a whole. Thanks for reviewing, and I take the constructive criticism, and not get mad............AAAAHHHAAAAA! |
| Shay |
09/15/05 - 05:14PM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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I like the idea, though I agree with Beer's review, you may want to seek out spell check. The grammatical errors and mechanical errors were the only things I found wrong with it! Good job, and I wouldn't worry about taking it down, if it offends someone than they can just not read it! -Marissa
Author's Response: OK, I don't spell well, everybody know that now, EVERYBODY!!!!!!
I'm just kidding, I'm working on the spelling, but since I don't have spell check anymore,I mess up sometimes. So please bear with me, a I'm glad you like the rest, Thank you. |
| DiabloVixen |
09/15/05 - 02:44PM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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YAY im so excited you posted earlier than you said i've been looking for it... You've written it better then i could have mentioned... and i agree you've written very good historically update soon
Author's Response: Glad your happy, but just because this is up early, doesn't mean it will be finnished soon (but then, thats what I always say, isn't it?). Thanks for the review. |
| redmoon |
09/15/05 - 08:11AM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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Well written and as historically accurate as anyone could ask. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm trying to be historically accurate (though the First is, probaly more conserned with making humans look horrible). |
| Beer Good |
09/15/05 - 03:29AM |
1: Chapter 1. |
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Off to a great start! You might want to do a spell check, but other than that, it's a good idea and it's moving along nicely... looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Yea, sorry about the spelling, I don't have a spellcheck anymore, and an having to use a dictionary (which, in the long run is probably better for me anyway). I though I caught a the mistakes, but after re reading it, there are some glaring ones. But I'll try to fix that. Glad you liked the rest, Thanks. |
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