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Reviews for The Past Is My Present




Michael J 01/02/05 - 11:41PM 3: Family Bonding Signed
There's a writing style choice here that bothers me a bit. You'll have one character speak a line, then on the same paragraph, you'll type another character's reaction. It tends to make me forget who said what and the flow is interrupted a bit. It might just be me, but if you're getting that from other people, you may want to consider adjusting. Aside from that, my only complaint here is that this was too short. Angel learning that he has a daughter and trying to be super cool dad was sweet.

Author's Response: Thanks for the input; when I have time, I'll go over the story and see how I can make the flow a little easier. And the main reason the chapter was short was because (unfortunately) school's begun again and I didn't have time to make it as long as I wanted.

Angellover 01/02/05 - 06:21PM 3: Family Bonding Signed
That was so cute. Angel meeting his daughter, Faith meeting her father. **huge grin**. Now update soon or else. **evil grin** Oh, and by the way, you totally just gave me an idea for later on in my story. You see, you write stuff like this and it get's me thinking and then I go completley insane and... well, this should be fun. Now stop reading this and go right more. Chop chop!

Author's Response: Isn't it funny to see Angel actually being (sorta) open to someone (other than Buffy). And, ooh, idea. I wonder what it is? ^_^
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