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Reviews for Running on Faith, Season Two




Quortoth 03/09/06 - 07:07PM 7: 2.07: Retaliation, Counter-retaliation Signed
That was a great story. I have that Anne Rice book 'Blood & Gold.' Just recently read it. I love reading Anne Rice. I've read 13 of her books since August. [I'm just saying.] I loved that scene between Dawn and Conner, then the soap, but that scene. I don't know if the word Suspense worked but that scene was great. I was waiting for him to kiss her. :-)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I've actually never read *Blood & Gold*, but thought it worked with the story. I was definitely going for a suspense/ anguish/ will they or won't they kiss kind of thing. I'm so glad you felt that. Thanks again.

Painbow 03/28/05 - 10:17PM 7: 2.07: Retaliation, Counter-retaliation Signed
'Lorne gave a slight cry of outrage at seeing the boy’s beaten up state, complete with cuts, bruises, and naked rib bones. “Of for the love of Freddy Krueger,” he groaned. “That’s just excessive!” '

Hee! I LOVE that moment!

I really enjoyed that chapter. Although I was sad to see du Pliess go, it was defiantely an infuriating (in a good way) death. I also like how you brought back the beozars, which were an interesting idea poorly used by the show, and turned them into something more. And I'm also liking the Dawn/Connor sub plot. The Anne Rice book was a nice touch. Made me snicker at the thought of Giles reading it *g* And I have NO idea who the informant is, though my first guess is Angel...

On a side note, my cousin Kirsty stumbled upon this story (because she never reads the rec's I post :p) and she absolutely loved it. She's a huge Connor fan and she loved the way you brought back the dark elements of his character. She's not a member of the site, so she asked me to pass along the message. It was pretty funny when it came up. "Heather, have you ever read "Running on Faith"? And then I rolled my eyes at her *g*

Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews! I don’t think I’m great at writing Lorne, so I’m really happy to know you liked the Lorne lines. I, too, was sad to see du Plessis go. I really want to try to structure things in the Buffy Little Bad/Big Bad way. Du Plessis and Wolfram & Hart were the Little Bad. The Markovics are the Big Bad. Maybe. I too thought the Beozars were a nice concept that could be recycled. I’m also glad the D/C plot is working for you. I’m really pulling for those two kids.

Thank your cousin Kristy for me. I’m glad she’s reading and enjoying. It’s a real rush getting this kind of feedback.

Monkey Pants 01/18/05 - 05:04AM 7: 2.07: Retaliation, Counter-retaliation Signed
A good chapter, with some funny one-liners... 'for the love of freddy krueger!'. I loved the inclusion of Lorne in the start of the chapter, he added a little je ne sais pas to the fic. The only problem with the chapter, and thats being nit-picky, is the length. Perhaps it could have been cut a little...but still, I enjoyed. Keep it ip!

Author's Response: Thanks as always for the review. I hear you on the length issue, but a whole lot was cut already. The chapter was originally close to 7,000 words. I pushed most of the fight scene at the end off to next chapter, but really wanted to leave a little bit in there. I cut an entire sequence of Riley and Xander plotting and arguing. There were a couple other smaller sequences I did away with as well. This was probably about as tight as I could get it.

Revello1620 12/19/04 - 03:00AM 7: 2.07: Retaliation, Counter-retaliation Signed
I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in a while but I have been pretty caught up in your Campus Life, but I am back into this one again and loving it to pieces! I like how you are the master of the Dawn/Connor angle but more than that I really enjoy this because I am constantly trying to figure out what is going to happen next! Seriously thought, your characters are amazingly witty and I appreciate that because it keeps the story from getting to heavy. Great job!

Author's Response: I appreciate all reviews, regardless of the time schedule. Besides, I haven't been updating for a while, so it's only fair you weren't reviewing. I do my best to be witty, so I'm happy it comes off that way. I also love playing with the Dawn/Connor angle. I really wanted to move this from somehting sweet and innocent to something very adult. After all, Dawn is a young adult. And while Connor is somewhat emotionally immature, he's been through more trauma than any adult. Hopefully whatever happens next wont disappoint.

Michael J 12/17/04 - 03:24PM 7: 2.07: Retaliation, Counter-retaliation Signed
I figured out the Ann Rice thing right when Giles did. I had a feeling Faith was lying to protect her source, but I'm still confused as to who the informant is. All signs seem to be pointing to Angel, but that would bear the question of how exactly he's getting that information. I'm still waiting for Faith to explain to someone who the Risen One was and I'm hoping for either Buffy or Dawn. Also really wanting to see more of the Markovic brothers since they were the cliffhanger at the end of the last season. I have a feeling that things will fall into place soon though. Great work.

Author's Response: Grrrraghhhh . . . YOU’RE SO CLOSE!!! Well, I guess it won’t be until next chapter, tentatively called “Coming In,” that we’ll figure out what’s going through Faith’s head. I’m glad you figured out the Ann Rice thing when Giles did. I’ve never read the book, so I didn’t think it was too vague a reference. But I was worried there for a bit. I don’t imagine Faith wants to discuss the trauma of dealing with “The Risen One” with anyone. It’ll probably be a confessional type scene with Spike. Your wish to see more of the Markovic brothers will be fulfilled fairly soon. They’re still peripheral to the next episode. But soon, they should probably take center stage before too long. I really hope things will fall into place soon. I need to get a little more awkward exposition out of the way, but not too much. After that, we should be ready to roll nonstop.

crayonbreaky gal 12/15/04 - 03:37PM 7: 2.07: Retaliation, Counter-retaliation Signed
OK, on the plus side, you kept the action moving along nicely. On the minus side, I really had trouble following the trail this time. Did they find Spike or not? Because you have Spike dialogue and then you say that Dru has Spike. Probably just typed the wrong name. The Connor/Dawn interaction is flowing nicely. Faith is still great. I would like to see more of Giles. His interaction with the gang would be interesting. I think that you ended the chapter on a really high note, cliffhanger and all. But remember, when you dribble out clues, don't be too coy with them. I don't understand the reference to the Ann Rice novel just yet, but I'm sure you'll tell us all about Marius soon enough. Will it be someone we know? Angel perhaps? Maybe the only problem with this chapter is it needed to be tightened up a little. It just seemed to slow down the momentum that you had going from the last chapters. I know it's hard when you have to get in lots of exposition, and you don't want to make it boring or useless. Keep going and good work all around. Your stuff is still better than 99% of the stuff written out there.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and catching the snag with Spike and Dru. Originally, I was going to have Dru take Spike. There were 100 references to this and it looks like I only deleted 99. I was in a rush to get this up, so I think I was probably pretty sloppy in that. But I deleted the last reference, so all should be good now. The gang has Spike back. I’m trying my best not to use too many of the old series’ characters, so Giles may not be around again, at least not any time soon. I don’t think I’m being coy with the clues. The reference to the Ann Rice novel is as follow. Faith didn’t want to tell Giles the name of her contact, so she picked a name that came to mind- Marius. Later, she described him as being from Italy. When Giles read the back cover of the Ann Rice novel that Faith couldn’t finish reading, he saw that it was about a character named Marius from Italy. He then realized that Faith was making up the information she gave him. At this point, I’m planning for Faith’s contact to appear in the next chapter. The contact will be someone you know. I’m not saying if it’s Angel or not. However, at one point, du Plessis makes a reference to someone and Faith “did the math in her head.” FYI, this would be the equivalent of Buffy season 10. I too think the chapter could use tightening, but the only parts I can think to cut are fun ones. I already axed two and a half fight scenes. As you noted, this chapter was heavy on exposition. I could’ve split the exposition into two chapters, but I think that would result in the “season” losing momentum, as opposed to the episode losing momentum. If you have any specific ideas for material that could be cut, let me know. I’m always glad to take suggestions. Thanks again for the review and for catching my oversight.
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