Reviews for Campus Life
| frenchtoast101 |
11/21/04 - 04:25PM |
8: 6. Mausoleum |
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Awesome! There are zombies now? Cool. =)
Author's Response: Glad you like. The zombies are around for at least one more chapter. |
| Poison Pen |
11/19/04 - 05:35PM |
7: 5. Two Moons |
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I’m going to babble a bit here—just a little disclaimer. It’s strange. I like Emily. I really don’t want to like Emily—the girl needs to get a grip on her hormones, she seriously lacks self-respect, and she’s way too needy, which makes her, in my opinion, an insult to women in general, but I’m warming up to her. I have hope for her. I see a lot of potential for growth, and that’s a positive and endearing thing. I’m hoping, especially with the latest development, she’ll “come into her own” a bunch. In any case, she’s really becoming a person for me, and that says a lot, considering I’m not all that keen on original characters in fan fic. They tend to be flat, or they don’t fit in, or they’re author ego. Emily’s not. And Dawn—I’m really appreciating the sarcasm and mischievousness of her attitude toward the whole Connor/Emily deal. I was worried she was going to revert back to her season five persona (because I really couldn’t stand her). I’m glad you’re letting her show her adult side. It makes her worthy of Connor’s affections, and an interesting character with or without him. Willow though—I thought you went more than a tad over the top with her reaction. Just didn’t seem like Willow to me. Seemed more like Dawn, season five. Sorry, just calling it like I see it. I’m wearing my Kevlar, so feel free to take aim. ;) Buffy . . . I thought she was the highlight of this whole chapter. Great characterization there. Nice depth. I really hope we see her interact with Connor more (just not in an “Eww” way, please—lol). Loved the action sequences here—one of your obvious strengths, and always fun to read. And your pace is just fantastic. Four thousand words is a good chunk of story, and you manage to make it feel like a mere few paragraphs, and all without skimping on setting. I always have a strong sense of place—can always see the picture. Great job. As always, looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I want to respond to this in depth later, but several people have mentioned something about Willow I wanted to address real quickly. I'd be extremely grateful if someone wouldn't read this as "He's writing Willow over the top. Bad Author!" It'd be nice if somebody said, "Wow, Willow's acting strangely. I wonder what's going on there. *Why* is she acting like that?" it's not all about protecting Dawn. She's angry about something else. Pay attention to some of things she said that almost didn't make sense. As for Emily, she does need to grip on her hormones, but there *are* some heavy mitigating circumstances. She needs to get a grip on a lot of things that are changing about her. I always wanted this story to be for college what Buffy was for high school. It's real life augmented by science fiction elements. In college, people have to decide who they are, much like Connor *really* has to decide who he is. He literally has two lives to choose from and a world of possibilities in between. Emily, like many college students, has to cope with change. She has new freedom coupled with new strengths and new responsibilities. I'll respond more to this later if I don't go A.D.D. I realize that your review was 90% flattering and I'm focusing on the negative. It's not that I'm a brat. I just wanted to put these thoughts out there so they *might* put the story in a different context for you. In the end, you may find the whole thing was still stupid and lacked any coherent explanation. But try to keep in mind that this story is not complete.
Author's Response: Thanks again for your review. More importantly, thanks again for focusing attention on Willow and her behavior. I’m glad Emil’s growing on you and hope she continues to do so. There will be ups and downs for her, but I can’t take this story where I want it to go if the character isn’t liked. I hated season 5 Dawn, too. In fact, I kind of don’t like Dawn in general. It’s odd that a guy who’s such a fan of bratty Connor hates bratty Dawn. But rather than abandon her, I decided to grow her up and make her someone I would like. Since the show is gone now, I can do this with relatively few obstacles. But she too will be up and down. No one constantly ascends in his or her maturity level. We all regress sometimes. Much like Dawn, I wanted to reform Buffy. She’s actually been increasingly on my nerves since the second half of season 4. But I’m baking her, so she’ll be less and less cookie dough as time goes on. To some extent, I wanted a contrast between Buffy and Willow. Willow is still treating Dawn like a child and Buffy knows Dawn has to grow up. Willow sees only Dawn’s side because Willow sees herself in Dawn. Willow was the girl who liked the guy who liked another girl. Part of Willow’s anger stems form that. Buffy sees the whole picture. You can’t make someone love you just by loving them. I was going to put as line about heart break in the story, but I’m saving it for Spike in RoF s.2. My chapters are long, so I’m always worried that people will be bored. I can’t tell you how relieved I am that you thought it flowed quickly. Hopefully the next chapter, “Mausoleum”, won’t test that patience. Thanks again! |
| Michael J |
11/19/04 - 12:05PM |
7: 5. Two Moons |
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Warning: This will be incoherent rambling. You said you weren't going to make things easy for Connor and Dawn. In my eyes, you've made it impossible. Dawn really has no claim on Connor whatsoever, but is perfectly in character in her reaction to his coupling with Emily. I actually like Connor with Emily. Sure it's a direct parallel to his dad (and come OFF IT Bangel shippers, there's no plausible reason why Buffy and Angel should be together in this fic...at all), but it still works in terms of setting up a dynamic with Connor and Dawn that you can play off of for however long you want. I don't see Dawn getting over her jealousy anytime soon (love her resigning herself to being the odd one out at the end there) and that's got to piss Connor off at one point. You've got your work cut out for you to get me to want Connor and Dawn together. I liked Willow being hyperdefensive of Dawn. I think you over did it just a little, but Willow had to be flashing back to when she found out about Xander and Cordelia. Anger doesn't bring out the champion in us. Honestly, my favorite character in the whole thing so far is Buffy. This is the Buffy we didn't get for the last two years of the show. She's hurting for her sister, but not so blinded by empathy that she can't look at the situation logically and be angry at Connor. She mediates the dinner situation and keeps everyone focused on the real task. She figures out who the werewolf is on pure instinct. Great writing for her. I don't want her in the story too much until you let everyone in Dawn's camp in on who Connor's dad is. Loving this so far.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like Emily. I'm with you that Dawn has no claim on Connor whatsoever, but that doesn't mean it's impossible that they'll get together. But I'm not saying they will, either. Like you, I like Connor with Emily. I'm glad you think I overdid Willow's defense of Dawn. There was a bit more at work than her protectiveness at Dawn and her own flashbacks to Xander's crushes on Buffy and Cordy. So hopefully you'll be wondering "Why was Willow THAT pissed?" Buffy really is the old Buffy again, but with the maturity of recent years as well. Buffy won't be in the story much and what makes you think *anyone* in Dawn's camp will be let in on who Connor's dad is? Thanks again for the review! I'm happy you're enjoying the story. |
| frenchtoast101 |
11/17/04 - 06:37PM |
7: 5. Two Moons |
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This chapter is AWESOME!!! You write each character's personalitly perfectly. Please write more soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm working on the next chpter of RoF2 and CL simmultaneously, meaning it'll probably be 100 years before I update, but I'll do my best. |
| crayonbreaky gal |
11/17/04 - 01:40PM |
7: 5. Two Moons |
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I hate to say this, but I don't particularly like Emily. I'm not sure why, but there's something about her that I just don't like. Maybe it's because this is hurting Dawn a lot. Connor is still being portrayed perfectly. Willow's defense of Dawn was quite interesting too.
Author's Response: It's okay to say you don't particularly like Emily. I was hoping to make her sympathetic, thereby creating conflict within the love triangle. I always hate love triangles where the romantic rival is a complete jerk. I think it's cheap writing. Granted, that's what I did with Craig, but that was a secondary plot that I didn't feel needed to be complex. However, don't be surprised if I make it harder and harder for you to not like Emily. It's actually very important to me if I'm going to move forward with a particular plot. Thanks *so* much for your compliment on my Connor writing. . Thanks also for saying Willow's defense is "interesting." Partly it's protectiveness of Dawn. Partly it's empathy; after the Will/Xand/Buff triangle of BtVS season 1, Willow knows how Dawn feels. But there's more in there. Or at least I hope there is. Thanks again for reading. I really love my readers! Especially because you're so smart and (I'm pretty sure) figured out who one of the werewolves was. I just hope my future surprises will be more, well, surprising. Thanks Again! |
| frenchtoast101 |
11/16/04 - 06:16AM |
6: 4. Issues of Timing (PG-13) |
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This story os AWESOME!!!! Please write more soon, i need more!!!!!
Author's Response: There will be more soon, so don't worry. I'm hoping by this weekend. |
| Poison Pen |
11/15/04 - 10:41PM |
5: 4. Issues of Timing |
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Interesting. I'm starting to believe things are more "like father, like son," than I thought at first. Can't wait to see how dinner at the Summer's place goes. That oughta be fun. :)
Author's Response: "Like father, like son" . . . absolutely. I have a lot of ideas for dinner the summers but they might get trimmed in favor of moving the story along. I've spent more time than I'd like on humor, angst, and awkwardness. It's about time I get back to hunting werewolves and kicking a**es. But I think you'll be happy with where this goes. |
| crayonbreaky gal |
11/15/04 - 01:37PM |
5: 4. Issues of Timing |
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You write Connor so well. He is going to be so busted when Buffy finds out everything. Connor is acting so much like a 19 year old in your fic. It's a perfect portrayal. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Yeah, Connor's a 19 year old guy alright. I'm looking forward to writing more, so I'm happy to read you're still interested. I'm hoping for a new chapter to be up by the weekend. |
| Monkey Pants |
11/15/04 - 03:04AM |
1: Full Moon on the Quad |
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Enjoying the story. I'm not usually a Connor fan, but you write him quite well in this fic. Also very readable. Although am kermit with envy over the fact that you can write several excellent stories at once....grrr...
Author's Response: I’m glad you enjoy the story and poor, poor Connor. I have a soft spot for the poor kid. Always have. Hope the fic will keep being readable for you. And thank for the Kermit with envy comment. I’m now Willow with the blushing. |
| faith_slayer89 |
11/14/04 - 05:33PM |
1: Full Moon on the Quad |
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By the way, Connor's a real idiot. Probably been pointed out before, but I'd just like to reiterate that. Never mind the little love triangle he's got going on with Emily and Dawn. How could he not know? How could he not see it, not know who the werewolf is? ...As a sidenote, that whole Angel-&-Nina-in-bed thing? I hope we won't be seeing more of that in the near future. Don't think I could handle it.
Author's Response: Connor’s not an idiot, he’s a 19-year old guy. It’s pretty close to an idiot, but there are subtle differences. The rest of my response is slightly spoilerish, so stop reading if you don't want some clues/ info. How could Connor not see it? I wonder if anyone sees *all* the clues because, as I said, there’s a major red herring out there. Well, actually it’s a pretty cheap red herring, but I think it’ll still be fun. As for Angel & Nina in bed, get used to it. They’re living together and sleeping in the same bed (excepting the werewolf nights). You’ll get a few chapters break from Angel in general, but after that, Angel (& Nina) will probably be back. |
| faith_slayer89 |
11/14/04 - 05:21PM |
5: 4. Issues of Timing |
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Liking the story so far. And if my guess about the werewolf's identity is right, then I can't wait to see what kind of antics ensue. Keep up the fantastic work.
Author's Response: Well, you might know who it is. I’ve been throwing out clues left and right, but there was a red herring or two as well. It depends on which clues you’re paying attention to. Yeesh. I may have written myself into a corner. However, antics will ensure. That’s a guarantee. Thanks so much for reading and for reviewing! |
| adancer |
11/14/04 - 06:49AM |
4: 3. Morning After Syndrome (PG-13) |
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Love that chapter.....I can'y believe Connor did that ith Emily...poor Dawn
Author's Response: Yeah, poor Dawn. Since when does anyone in the Buffyverse get together without pain and heartache first? |
| Poison Pen |
11/14/04 - 02:55AM |
3: 3. Morning After Syndrome |
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Poor Connor. Kid can't win for losing. Hope he goes through with dating Emily--and then I hope she gets ripped apart by the werewolf, just as soon as it gets done with Alyson. And poor Dawn--boy, did she get her signals crossed. Too bad for her the apple apparently doesn't fall too far from the tree. That boy's as clueless as his father. Still very much enjoying the read. Hope there's more soon.
Author's Response: Oh, there’s more. Connor and Dawn are thrown together in every fic that has both of them. They’re probably going to wind up together in this one, too. But if they are, damn it, then I’m going to make it hard as hell on them. Connor is definitely as clueless as his father. As for Emily getting ripped apart by a werewolf, I’m not sure I see that happening any time soon. You might want to get used to her (and her mood swings). Thanks for the review. I'm hoping to have the next chapter up this week, but it's running long. I'm not sure whether I'll split it in two, edit the hell out of it, or just have a big ol' 6000 word chapter. I'm hesitant to spend four episodes on a werewolf, but if I can't find anything to cut, I may not have a choice. |
| crayonbreaky gal |
11/14/04 - 01:42AM |
3: 3. Morning After Syndrome |
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So typical of guys. And you've made Connor so typical, even though he has superhuman strength, etc. That was so stupid of him to do with Emily. And he totally missed all the signs, now didn't he. I liked all the hints that you dropped. Very good planning. I feel so sorry for Dawn. Can she get back at him? Good, angsty college age writing going on here. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Yep, typical guys. Welcome to college. Yada, yada, yada. This was the drama half of an action/drama chapter that went on longer than I’d like. Thanks for the comment about hint dropping. I dropped a ton of hints, but poor dumb Connor just couldn’t see it. If you get the chance, can you e-mail me about what hints you got? More angsty college writing coming soon. |
| adancer |
11/13/04 - 10:54AM |
1: Full Moon on the Quad |
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please say it's a definate maybe
Author's Response: Sorry. You'll have to wait and see. |
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