Reviews for Last Goodbye
| Revello1620 |
12/05/04 - 07:27AM |
1: Goodbye |
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| This was both touching and sweet and I truly enjoyed the way the she found Angel's letter when she needed it |
| MebbtheScribe |
07/28/04 - 01:53PM |
1: Goodbye |
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| This story you wrote is what is known as a "Short But Sweet" tale. You had angst in it. It was there. You have got the writing bug. Keep your tales coming. You're doing wonderful. |
| Chelle |
07/19/04 - 01:00AM |
1: Goodbye |
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This is your first one? Wow! Its good!I liked the idea behind it, very much, in fact. Although I felt that it could be a little angstier, just richly overflowing with emotion. Thicker perhaps? The emotion was good, but could be more. The goal with angst is that the reader wants to rip out their own heart, or at least use up a box of tissues during the last few paragraphs. I felt that the letter from Whistler could be a smidge more personal, and the letter from Angel a little longer. He had alot to tell her from the months since he had visited her in Sunnydale. Other than that stuff, and maybe a little editing, it was really good. I loved the idea, although I wouldnt want Angel to die :-(
Sorry to be so long winded :-D I'm still new at this too. :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for your advice I'll keep it in mind the next time I write. |
| always angel |
07/17/04 - 03:51PM |
1: Goodbye |
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| this is my first fanfic please review and I will return the favor! |
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