Reviews for Surprise!
| SpiKeVamPsiTuP |
08/02/04 - 11:03PM |
1: Surprise! |
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this seems like a great story . . but i was confused about several parts. i didn't get anything that happened with dawn and spike and buffy in the gift shop. it confused me a lot. but otherwise . . i think you should make more chapters because i want to see wht happens next! just try to watch ur grammar and stuff and im sure it will come out great!
Author's Response: well it kinda was confusing but the 2nd time ya read it it gets easier |
| Shay |
07/18/04 - 09:31PM |
1: Surprise! |
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Hi. I'm with Benny on this one. Your grammer, and punctuation makes the story hard to read. Also, you skip around from person to person, and don't always put a name with a quote. You don't always put quotes in quotation marks, which, again, makes it confusing. I can't understand your stories, or their plots. I think they could be great stories, if only you could fix up all the mechanics, grammer, and other things in them. I'd be happy to beta read if you wanted. My email is: rachay87@hotmail.com.
Again, I like your stories, but sometimes have to read them five or six times to understand them.
Author's Response: as i said with benny.i was rushing.im sorry but its not that hard to read.and the reason some of the lines dont have a name is because it is quite obvious to see whos saying it! |
| Benny |
07/08/04 - 11:34AM |
1: Surprise! |
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This is a good idea, but the spellling and punctuation let's it down. I would like to see what happens next, and I think it could be a great story with some hard work.
Author's Response: im sorry for the spelling but i was rushing!I havent finished it but it would be good if ya reviewed me with some more ideas!thanx |
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