Reviews for Their Baby
| terry |
07/31/05 - 04:13AM |
1: Chapter 1 |
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| Cool Story. You should keep going with it. I wonder if Buffy and Angel's secrets (B: the details of her relationship with Spike. A: His relationship with Cordy and Connor's existence) will come out to haunt them. Keep going! |
| Revello1620 |
12/03/04 - 10:10AM |
1: Chapter 1 |
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| This is a great idea for a story but if you don't mind me offering advice I would flesh out the story until it was fatter. You right like a reporter, you cover the event and get the story across but alot of the details end up on the editing room floor. What you have is good, so don't be afraid to add more to get the readers deeper into the story |
| frenchtoast101 |
10/19/04 - 06:08AM |
2: Chapter 2 |
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| Me likey. Maybe you can cram more ships into the story too. =) |
| Shay |
08/08/04 - 08:17PM |
2: Chapter 2 |
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I really liked this, and hope you add more soon! The chapters were kind of short, but I still enjoyed them! The only thing I wish there was more of, is dialogue. I hope in future chapters you have more dialogue between the characters. There are going to be future chapters, right? Please say yes!
Author's Response: yes there will be future chapters but not many im considering making a sequel 10 yrs in the future |
| Shay |
07/24/04 - 08:40PM |
1: Chapter 1 |
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| Hi! I would really like to read more of this! It's interesting to think of Angel and Buffy having a baby! I hope you write more soon, good job! -Marissa |
| Kellcool |
06/29/04 - 06:57AM |
1: Chapter 1 |
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I agree with inlovewithangel, u need to make the sentences more fuller as well, get the reader more gripped.
Author's Response: thank you for your reviews ill do just what you suggested thnks
Author's Response: thank you for your reviews ill do just what you suggested thnks |
| inlovewithangel |
06/28/04 - 09:03PM |
1: Chapter 1 |
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Hmm... I'd like to see how you progress with this. Think about doing seperate paragraphs, though. It makes it simpler to read. Nice work!
Author's Response: thankz ill start separate paragraphs for the next chapter |
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