| Overall review: Very nice. Well-detailed, excellently calibrated fight scene, and mostly good characterization. To answer your questions: characters are completely up to you. I don't want to suggest who to include because I want to be surprised. That's the beauty of these fictions; the characters are already created. I want you to complete the plot. To destroy the Senior Partners always seemed far-fetched, but again, it's your fiction. I'm just thinking, if Angel had that much trouble with Hamilton, fighting the Partners themselves really will be a death mission, even if they live through this. It is up to you, though. Illyria is the only one you've written slightly out of character. She is amusing, but her words are too human; she's sarcastic rather than humourously out of the loop. I would work on her ever so slightly, but it's seriously not a big enough problem to affect the overall feel of the fiction. You've done excellently with the other characters; one slight emphatical problem isn't enough to reasonably complain about. Again, you're obviously a compelling writer. You hopefully have a general direction in which to take this. Carry on; I hope to see the update shortly. :) | 
