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Reviews for Willow's Dilemma




slayerfest 07/10/06 - 12:57PM 1: Chap. 1: The beginning Signed
Umm. Very short, very lacking in detail. Mostly you said that Willow's sister came to visit, called Willow a loser, and then turned into a vampire and so Buffy staked her. Try to incorporate some emotion, some detail; does Willow resent her sister enough to be happy she's dust? Is she sad regardless? Give a bit more history between Willow and the new character; they're sisters, and Leigh was mean, but why hadn't we heard of Leigh before? Maybe you explained all this and I just missed it. But anyway. The plot was certainly interesting; I will be watching out for more stories from you, but try to engage the reader a bit more. It seemed like you were trying to get to the end as quickly as possible.

Author's Response: You're right. I'll try to fix this with my next story. Coming up today! I was trying to get to the end soon because my little brother was trying to delete the story. I'm glad he did'nt!

slayerfest 07/09/06 - 08:39PM 1: Chap. 1: The beginning Signed
Ahahaha. How coincidental, that's sort of my name. Interesting plot, but I'm not so sure this format is the best for the story. Try to make the chapters a little longer, too. Definitely interested, though... carry on. :)

Author's Response: Thanks. I did exactly what you said with the 2nd chapter. I'll try to keep posted and keep adding new chapters. I'm not the best speller, though. Lol!
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