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Redefinition 05/17/06 - 05:28AM 1: prologue Signed
Random! Good idea but totallly random...I think I like it. Ok one tiny point though, you kinda over use the words "he, himself, she, herself". I know you want to try and create tension but the overused repetition of the words kinda makes it...well I'm not explaining it well. Just a tip but there are other words that can be used to break up the jumble of those words for exanmple: "The man, the woman, the figure etc" Apart form that, I look forward to the rest! :-)

Author's Response: thanks!! glad you like it and yeah it was ideed a random idea... thought it would be fun to see how it would devellop in my head... thanks for the tips though... i will definatly try and work on that... thanks again






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