Reviews for Changed
| Cheza |
04/24/06 - 02:00PM |
4: Part 4 |
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Aaaww yay! I love Oz and Willow. I was never a fan of Tara, I mean, I didnt mind willow being gay, but I didnt like Tara, and I have always loved Oz. I have also wondered what it would be like if the slayer ever got bite by a werewolf- that would be a complication! Anyway, cute story, I liked it.
Author's Response: Hey! thanks for reviewing! Only the second fan fic ive ever wrote so not bad!...I loved Oz too...he was soooooo great!........I was gutted when he left! |
| Cheza |
04/24/06 - 01:58PM |
3: Part 3 |
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| eeee! haha I'd like to see that lady try to put them BACK in the cages thou lol! |
| Cheza |
04/24/06 - 01:56PM |
2: Part 2 |
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| Dun dun dun dun! To the rescue! High ho Silver! |
| Cheza |
04/24/06 - 01:54PM |
1: Part 1 |
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| ooo its a good cliffhanger, personally, I think Oz should have known better than to trust some random witchy chick...but he was just looking for a cure. Anyway, I'll check more out. |
| MissEdith |
04/15/06 - 11:52AM |
4: Part 4 |
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The third chapter was my favorite. You write Xander very well, IMO. Just two nitpicky things: 1) Buffy asked Willow if she and Oz had been "rowing," a word which I don't think Buffy would use (I think she'd say "have you been fighting" or something like that); 2) how come all of the werewolves were boys/men? There are female wolves *coughverucacough*
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I completely forgot about the whole female werewolves thing! I suppose I just associate werewloves with males lol! I'm glad you said I write Xander well, he's my fave character! |
| MissEdith |
04/04/06 - 04:28PM |
1: Part 1 |
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I hope you don't mind constructive criticism because that's what I'm about to give you. I feel like this story has some good potential, but also some things that need work. 1) There are several typos and stuff; you might want to read this over a few more times before posting it. 2) "She was about to call him when a rather handsome young lad appeared in front of her, panting and out of breath." There are two problems with this sentence. The first is that the word "lad" sounds really out of place in something that is from Willow's point of view, seeing as how people don't really say "lad" in America. The second problem is that I assumed it was somebody Willow didn't know. Willow is asking herself where Oz is, so it seems strange that when he appears he's not immediately referred to as Oz. I hope you know what I mean. 3) Oz is too wordy. Much too wordy.
Author's Response: Thanks for the tips! I'l take them in mind when i wirte again soon!
Author's Response: I know what you mean about Oz being to wordy, I had real trouble writing for him lol! Hope I do better next time! |
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