Reviews for Ain't destiny's grand?
| Peaches Girl |
04/02/06 - 11:42PM |
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| I think this was a great chapter. I think we need to know the significance of the necklace and how Buffy knew who sent Cassie. Update soon please. |
| MissEdith |
04/02/06 - 07:45PM |
35: Chapter 35 |
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I thought the chapter was pretty good. I did wonder about a few things - the seemingly random selection of the name Cassie (and then the C necklace?), the huge fire that somehow went unnoticed (when Buffy said a truck was coming, I thought it must be a fire truck at first), and Willow being instantly powerful. It does make sense that Willow-at-19 (she's 19, right?) would be more powerful than Willow-at-17, but it's still a bit odd that she's able to hold her own against a whatever-Cassie-is.
Author's Response: Hey, i don't think i've heard from you in a while... If i have, disregard that, but HI! anyway. In answer to your questions, (or comments) Cassie, just 'cause i could. The bad guy should always be named. Less fear that way. Buffy named hers. As for the fire; It's Sunnnydale, land of denial. Buffy did mention the authorities but she knew they wouldn't come. And Willow? that will be explained. She has a secret. Tsk, tsk, tsk... |
| michebabyblue |
04/02/06 - 04:52PM |
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I myself couldn't find anything wrong with this chapter, I hope Buffy finds Angel soon, that was so cool having oz come to the rescue. Such a change. Nice to see Giles didn't get knocked unconsious and willow hholding her own. want more need more. I can't believe you said it's almost finished.
Author's Response: Almost, not yet. Miles to go before we sleep.... |
| Javian |
04/02/06 - 11:42AM |
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I thought it was a great chapter, pretty well-written. Though the whole huge fire out in the front lawn thing seems a bit crazy...I'm wondering if the neighbors'll notice. Interesting how Willow's already so powerful...it was kinda sudden. Loved Oz's entrance. Nicely done anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hi! The fire thing will be ignored because it's Sunnydale. No one notices anything... and Willow will be explained. I thought Oz would be the right person to save their collective butts.. |
| Spicule |
04/02/06 - 09:08AM |
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Despite what you said at the end, I thought it was a pretty good chapter. The action was fast-paced and quick-changing, which are necessary in a good fight scene. I liked how things unraveled to reach that end point, too. You're good at keeping the main idea in mind as you write. I guess if I had to agree with you on anything, I'd be the lack of dialogue. It's not a huge factor, but it's enough to make the story seem less involved (especially Cassie, i think i good villian always needs to talk). But that's just a minor issue in an otherwise great chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for your reviews, it's great that you like it. I agree about the dialogue and although Buffy is good at punning while she fights, this fight was intense and Buffy needed concentration. I couldn't write any dialogue that worked, so i didn't write any. |
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