Reviews for Discipline
| Peaches Girl |
03/21/06 - 11:12AM |
10: Office Space, Part II |
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Snyder is such an ass. I do like that he shows compassion, at least a little, towards his students. Great work I cant wait until you update again.
Author's Response: Thanks! Snyder really is an asshole, but whether he is actually EVIL is an entirely different matter... we'll see! |
| axel |
03/21/06 - 02:59AM |
10: Office Space, Part II |
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Yes, Synder chracter deveopment, that's better than finding out, if WILLOW DIES! Other than that, it was good. I'm surprised Snyder seems to care, a little.
Author's Response: Do you realize how much paperwork he has to fill out everytime a student dies? But yeah, just because he hates kids might not mean he wants them to die... We'll see. |
| slayerfest |
03/20/06 - 04:45PM |
10: Office Space, Part II |
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Ahahahahaha. I like the "one hour earlier" and then "one hour later". It sounds redundant but makes perfect sense. This chapter has a much better impression to it. Somehow you're piecing it together differently... I like that we see the first part of the sequence followed by an interlude followed, assumably, by the second part of the sequence. I don't know what's changed, but it seems much better.
Author's Response: I guess part of the problem is I'm simply so slow in writing this down. I've got the story planned out in my head, but when I just post it piece by piece you don't get where everything is going... but there is a point to everything I've written so far, and there will be a few big payoffs in the hopefully near future... Thanks for reviewing! |
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