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punk 03/20/06 - 04:25PM 1: What Happened to Xander Signed
Hey mate, nice piece! I would have liked to see a little more description in the fight section – it seemed to end so quickly… a couple of things like what the demon looked like, how Buffy moved to defeat it and keep her towel on (great possibility for humour there!) and possibly a little more connective tissue to help you build up to the big final moment might have worked nicely. That and some formatting issues aside, I really liked the tone of the piece and would like to see you continue with it. There were some cool lines in there and some real potential to improve. At the risk of sounding preachy – never pass up the opportunity to be creative!! Cheers.
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