Reviews for The Generations
| axel |
09/01/05 - 12:03AM |
1: Destiny |
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Great so far, and I'm glad you did this, instead of the future story (nothing against future story, I just think seeing the Slayer in different times in history is more intresting). By the way, why is there only one Slayer anyway, that's like the most one sided fight ever. I'll shut up now.
Author's Response: Thank you for the compliments, and thank you for posting the challenge! I think more people should post challenges, I know I enjoy them! I thought about doing a future story, but decided to go with the Middle Ages instead. Not sure why there is only one Slayer, but there is, and the Slayer in my story will think about that fact a lot during her journey. And don't shut up, I love your reviews! Thanks again! -Marissa |
| punk |
08/30/05 - 10:09PM |
1: Destiny |
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Oh. My. God. Great stuff - that facing the vampire scene was exactly what it needed, and the little coda at the end of the chapter was about ten times more powerful the second time around!! Oh, and - "He was a splendid orator, and still had Elizabeth’s rapt attention..." - great language. Very impressed!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement! I'm glad the changes were well received. I believe I did in fact dedicate that chapter to you? If not, I'm going to do that right now! Thanks again! -Marissa |
| BelovedSlayer |
08/27/05 - 11:28PM |
1: Destiny |
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This is a great story and its long which i really love lots. This reminds me of tales of the slayer books because i think in volume one or two they had a story about a Slayer falling in love with her Watcher and stuff.
This is great. keep up the good work and if you can please check out my Fallen Angel fic. thanx and please update ASAP!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for such a kind review! This story will be fairly long, seeing as I have a lot of ground to cover. I did not know about the 'slayer falling in love with her watcher' stuff in the slayer books, I haven't read them all. I did read some of Fallen Angel, but haven't finished it yet, and so I didn't write a review, but I will go do that right now! Keep up the good work on your stories as well, I enjoy reading them! Thanks again! -Marissa |
| redmoon |
08/27/05 - 10:11PM |
1: Destiny |
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Excellent beginning: succinct and elegant. I think axel's challenge (as one who is also taking it) was a great idea. I'm sensing a possible Watcher-Slayer romace angle... ;-) Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: I am not at liberty to discuss the Watcher-Slayer comment! (hehe) And I agree, axel's challenge was a wonderful idea. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Getting such a good review from you, is like having some really important person give you a million dollars! Seriously though, I'm glad you are enjoying it, and that you think I did a good job, that is high praise coming from someone as talented as you. Thank you very much for the review, and I hope you continue to enjoy! -Marissa |
| punk |
08/27/05 - 08:42PM |
1: Destiny |
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Awe-some. Seriously. The thing that impressed me was that the language of the piece reflected the times. Like when she says that she felt as if she had said something quite silly. The vivid descriptions really set the scene, and I loved the line about how it smelled like rotting meat, as it so would have back then! My only sticking point is that I felt it wrapped up a little too quickly at the end. I would have liked to have read a little more as to how she came to terms with the idea of being a slayer - but with the exception of that small point, I loved the direction and really enjoyed the piece! Very well done!!
Author's Response: You are my first reviewer-thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it, and as an extra special thank you, I have revised the chapter. I added a scene from the actual party that I hope makes you feel a little better about the ending. Thank you for the constructive critism, I enjoy all reviews! I hope you enjoy the new scene in this chapter, it was written just for you! Maybe I'll put a dedication in there! Well, it was written because you noticed the lacking of a "coming to terms" scene. I felt like something was missing, and when I read your review I realized what it had been. I feel much better about this chapter now, and I hope you do as well! Thanks again! -Marissa |
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