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BelovedSlayer 10/08/05 - 12:26AM 5: The One Signed
I wonder what's gonna happen now between the Watcher and Elizabeth? Are they gonna get in trouble because they're having lovey dovey feelings between in each other? i think that would be so really interesting if they do, i'm looking forward to reading that part. hee hee hee. anyways, keep up the great super great work and to let you know you are doing such an amazing job as a fellow author!! keep it up and update ASAP even thought its been a while!!

axel 09/15/05 - 07:56PM 5: The One Signed
You will be the greatest Slayer of all, yea I've used that, pick up line before (besides we all know it's Faith) Anyway Your still doing a good job on this, keep it up.

Author's Response: Well, they didn't know about Faith at the time! (hehe) Thanks very much for the review, I always love reading them. I'm sorry this last chapter took so long, but my muse ran away on a paid vacation with my creativity! Thanks again, I'll update as soon as possible! -Marissa

punk 09/07/05 - 07:51PM 3: Stitch Signed
The one you opened the chapter with... the stitch in the quilt!!! I thought it was a nice way to tie the slayer line together!!!!

Author's Response: Oh! (duh Marissa) I t hought you were talking about a different chapter. And thanks! I had all of the chapter titles picked out when I started the story, to help me know what to discuss. I wanted to use that analogy to show Elizabeth's place in the Slayer lineage, and help establish a connection with her past Slayer sisters. Thanks again! -Marissa

punk 09/06/05 - 10:08PM 4: In a corner Signed
Nice construction of the figth scene - nothing better than a perspective change or a sharp cut to keep you reading!! I also really enjoyed the conflict between her new role and her life role - "If anyone were to see her, her families remaining shreds of dignity would be in shambles." That line alone not only tells you about her conflict, but also her families position in the society - great storytelling. Keep up the excellent work!!

Author's Response: Thank you kind sir! I really wanted to play up her conflict with herself and her role in society (and in her family) I did this mainly because I am about to throw a few more hurdles at her to jump over, and those new conflicts will be playing a huge role. I am about to throw a curveball into this story, I just hope you guys don't think it is too cliche, or uninventive, because that is just how Elizabeth thinks the story should go. I am but a pawn to her character, and shall go where she leads me. I hope you guys are enjoying the story, and continue to enjoy it when I turn the world upside down! Thanks for the review! -Marissa

punk 09/06/05 - 10:02PM 3: Stitch Signed
Oh, and I forgot to mention - sweet analogy!!!

Author's Response: Which analogy? -Marissa

punk 09/06/05 - 10:01PM 3: Stitch Signed
Excellent stuff - It's building and coming along very nicely... I like the occassional references to the period - spice, coin bag (etc) - and particularly enjoyed the Watcher's urge to comfort her... you can feel the potential!! (No pun intended)

Author's Response: (laughs insanely) I'm glad you are enjoying it and think it is progressing well. I have a passion for history, especially the European Middle Ages, so I try and make refrences when I think they are suitable. And I'm glad you are "feeling the potential" I will go ahead and tell you that something is going to happen between them, and there is about to be a big plot twist a few chapters down the line. Thanks for reading! -Marissa

axel 09/06/05 - 09:45PM 4: In a corner Signed
Great fight sence, maybe one day you'll write a movie that even Matt Damon can't screw up (sorry, I saw that sucky movie yesterday, and I'm still pissed, I'll shut up.) Keep it up.

Author's Response: I had my worries about the fight scene, I am glad someone is enjoying it! I'm not the best at fight scenes (if you notice, I try and keep them to a minimum in all my stories, focusing more on internal action) Sorry you didn't like the movie, I normally like Matt Damon, but have not seen Brothers Grimm yet. I loved their story collection, so I'm excited about seeing it as a movie-though most movies based on books never do the books justice. Thanks! -Marissa

axel 09/06/05 - 09:36PM 3: Stitch Signed
Really liking it so far, I really is'nt fair that one girl has to be the only Slayer (why is it always a girl anyway, I mean it's kind of sexies, don't you think, if it was always a guy, that wouldn't be right, would it? Shut up Axel). Anyway, the period works well to, it's already better that the movie "The Brothers Grimm" (did I just say that, Damn Matt Damon). Keep it up.

Author's Response: I want to see that movie so bad! Okay...now to the actual response to your review! Thank you for the compliments, and I am glad you are enjoying it, I enjoy writing it. I am excited about character development and story progression, I have a lot in store for our Middle Ages Slayer, I hope you guys are shocked when the actual "reveal" is revealed! Thanks again! -Marissa

axel 09/01/05 - 12:03AM 1: Destiny Signed
Great so far, and I'm glad you did this, instead of the future story (nothing against future story, I just think seeing the Slayer in different times in history is more intresting). By the way, why is there only one Slayer anyway, that's like the most one sided fight ever. I'll shut up now.

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliments, and thank you for posting the challenge! I think more people should post challenges, I know I enjoy them! I thought about doing a future story, but decided to go with the Middle Ages instead. Not sure why there is only one Slayer, but there is, and the Slayer in my story will think about that fact a lot during her journey. And don't shut up, I love your reviews! Thanks again! -Marissa

punk 08/30/05 - 10:19PM 2: Slayer Lore Signed
I really enjoyed this chapter - it felt like a really well paced character exercise. The thing that struck me most is that you knew that you were dealing with characters we've never met before, and that you have taken the opportunity in this chapter to not be bound to the idea of having to make each chapter filled with action. You have taken a far more mature approach in building the characters and their feelings about each other without them even having met - and that is excellent writing. In case you haven't noticed, I was really impressed by the maturity of the piece. Oh yeah, and great descriptions too!!! One last thing - don't stress about the chapter size, I know it's my personal taste, but I enjoy chapters about that length - gives just enough to keep me waiting for the next post!!

Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter, it was very fun to write. I'm also glad you don't mind the "not action packed" part, because the next few chapters will deal a lot with the history of the characters, and help set the scene for the rest of the story. Thanks for the maturity comments. I'm glad that you think my characters are developing well, that is great praise! I'm really letting the time period and new characters take over the writing (I know it sounds odd, but that is where the language and descriptions come from!) And thank you for the confidence boost, I was worried about the chapter lengths, I'm glad you don't mind them! Thanks again, it is really helpful to me, and gets me ready to write the next chapter! -Marissa

punk 08/30/05 - 10:09PM 1: Destiny Signed
Oh. My. God. Great stuff - that facing the vampire scene was exactly what it needed, and the little coda at the end of the chapter was about ten times more powerful the second time around!! Oh, and - "He was a splendid orator, and still had Elizabeth’s rapt attention..." - great language. Very impressed!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement! I'm glad the changes were well received. I believe I did in fact dedicate that chapter to you? If not, I'm going to do that right now! Thanks again! -Marissa

BelovedSlayer 08/27/05 - 11:28PM 1: Destiny Signed
This is a great story and its long which i really love lots. This reminds me of tales of the slayer books because i think in volume one or two they had a story about a Slayer falling in love with her Watcher and stuff. This is great. keep up the good work and if you can please check out my Fallen Angel fic. thanx and please update ASAP!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for such a kind review! This story will be fairly long, seeing as I have a lot of ground to cover. I did not know about the 'slayer falling in love with her watcher' stuff in the slayer books, I haven't read them all. I did read some of Fallen Angel, but haven't finished it yet, and so I didn't write a review, but I will go do that right now! Keep up the good work on your stories as well, I enjoy reading them! Thanks again! -Marissa

redmoon 08/27/05 - 10:11PM 1: Destiny Signed
Excellent beginning: succinct and elegant. I think axel's challenge (as one who is also taking it) was a great idea. I'm sensing a possible Watcher-Slayer romace angle... ;-) Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: I am not at liberty to discuss the Watcher-Slayer comment! (hehe) And I agree, axel's challenge was a wonderful idea. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Getting such a good review from you, is like having some really important person give you a million dollars! Seriously though, I'm glad you are enjoying it, and that you think I did a good job, that is high praise coming from someone as talented as you. Thank you very much for the review, and I hope you continue to enjoy! -Marissa

punk 08/27/05 - 08:42PM 1: Destiny Signed
Awe-some. Seriously. The thing that impressed me was that the language of the piece reflected the times. Like when she says that she felt as if she had said something quite silly. The vivid descriptions really set the scene, and I loved the line about how it smelled like rotting meat, as it so would have back then! My only sticking point is that I felt it wrapped up a little too quickly at the end. I would have liked to have read a little more as to how she came to terms with the idea of being a slayer - but with the exception of that small point, I loved the direction and really enjoyed the piece! Very well done!!

Author's Response: You are my first reviewer-thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it, and as an extra special thank you, I have revised the chapter. I added a scene from the actual party that I hope makes you feel a little better about the ending. Thank you for the constructive critism, I enjoy all reviews! I hope you enjoy the new scene in this chapter, it was written just for you! Maybe I'll put a dedication in there! Well, it was written because you noticed the lacking of a "coming to terms" scene. I felt like something was missing, and when I read your review I realized what it had been. I feel much better about this chapter now, and I hope you do as well! Thanks again! -Marissa
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